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=== [[Korean War]] ===

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I have been editing this article for a few days. I ran down through the article and fixed any grammer mistakes I could find. I would appreciate any suggestions on what to do and how I can really improve it further. Thanks a lot. [[User:Mr. Killigan|Mr. Killigan]] 06:17, 12 July 2007 (UTC)

|+ style="font-size: larger;" | '''Luisa "Loi" P. Ejercito-Estrada'''

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| colspan="2" style="text-align: cenmter;" | [[Image:Lestrada2.gif|center]]

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| colspan="2" | <center>'''Senator of the Philippines'''<br>[[2001]]&ndash;''incumbent''</center>

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| colspan="2" | <center>'''First Lady of the Philippines'''<br>[[1998]]&ndash;[[2001]]</center>

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! Political&nbsp;Party:

| [[Pwersa ng Masang Pilipino]]

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! Born:

| [[June 2]] [[1930]] (age 76)<br>[[Iba]], [[Zambales]]

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! Spouse:

| [[Joseph Estrada]]

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==== Kirill Lokshin ====

'''Luisa "Loi" Pimentel Ejercito Estrada''' (born June 2, [[1930]] in [[Iba, Zambales]]) is the wife of former [[Philippine President]] [[Joseph Estrada]], and was the thirteenth [[First Lady of the Philippines]] from [[1998]] to [[2001]]. In 2001, she ran as a candidate of the opposition for a seat in the Senate. She won, and served in the 12th and the current 13th [[Congress of the Philippines]], making her the first First Lady to win a seat in the Senate. Her son, [[Jinggoy Estrada|Jose Jinggoy Estrada]] is also a Senator serving with her in the Upper Chamber. She is a psychiatrist by profession, known as very close to the poor. She was dubbed as ''"First Lady ng Masa"'' (First Lady of the Masses) because of her medical and outreach missions during her term.

There are a number of areas to work on, at this point; keep in mind, though, that this is a very high-profile article, so you should be careful to move slowly and carefully to avoid getting entangled in any editorial conflicts here.

* <s>The article is, in my opinion, simply too long; we're looking at 72K (~12,000 words) of prose. The "Legacy" section, in particular, is ripe for splitting out into a separate [[Legacy of the Korean War]] article, with a much shorter summary left in the main one.</s>

* <s>"Korean War (1950 – 1953)" should really be something like "Course of the war"; you probably don't want to repeat the article title as a section heading.</s>

* The citations need cleanup; at a minimum, all of the embedded external links should be converted to footnotes. There are also a number of "citation needed" tags floating around. Beyond that, more thorough citation would be appropriate throughout the article; see [[WP:MILHIST#CITE]] for some guidelines.

* <s>The "Depictions" section should be turned into prose, rather than a laundry list of films; see also [[WP:MILHIST#POP]].</s>

* <s>The "Names" section, as it's presently constituted, would work much better as a narrow sidebar; it's of some interest, but I doubt there's enough material to sustain a separate section.</s>

* <s>The "See also" section should be eliminated. If something isn't worth linking from the text, it's generally not worth linking at all. </s>

* <s>The rump "Bibliography" section should be removed as well.</s>

* The "External links" section could use trimming.

Hope that helps! [[User:Kirill Lokshin|Kirill]] 04:08, 13 July 2007 (UTC)<s>cool</s>

::Thank you very much for offering your opinion! [[User:Mr. Killigan|Mr. Killigan]] 00:57, 14 July 2007 (UTC)

==External links==

*[http://www.senate.gov.ph/senators/sen_bio/estrada_bio.htm Senate of the Philippines - Loi Estrada]

*[http://www.senate.gov.ph/senators/former_senators/luisa_estrada.htm Senate of the Philippines - Loi Estrada biography]

* [http://loi-estrada.blogspot.com/ Loi Estrada Blog]

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after= None<br><small>([[Gloria Macapagal-Arroyo|the next President]] has a [[Jose Miguel Arroyo|husband]])</small>}}

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