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=== [[Korean War]] ===

'''10-10-321''' is a long-distance phone service best known for its prolific television advertising in the late 1990s. 10-10-321 was the first mass-marketed service of its type, and it and the similar '''10-10-240''' service were both owned by [[Telecom USA]], which was owned by [[MCI]]. All services of its kind essentially allow consumers to bypass, or "dial-around" their primary long-distance carrier and use a different one.<ref name="ca">http://consumeraffairs.com/news02/10_rates.html</ref>

I have been editing this article for a few days. I ran down through the article and fixed any grammer mistakes I could find. I would appreciate any suggestions on what to do and how I can really improve it further. Thanks a lot. [[User:Mr. Killigan|Mr. Killigan]] 06:17, 12 July 2007 (UTC)

==== Kirill Lokshin ====

The services originally used just 10- followed by a 3-digit number, such as '''10-321''', but quickly ran out of numbers. They advertised various savings over traditional long-distance companies, most famously 10-10-240 offered 20 minutes for $0.99 and $0.10 a minute after that.<ref>http://www.thecommondenominator.com/cl050399.html</ref>

There are a number of areas to work on, at this point; keep in mind, though, that this is a very high-profile article, so you should be careful to move slowly and carefully to avoid getting entangled in any editorial conflicts here.

The services were both advertised heavilly, using celebrities such as [[James Garner]], [[Dennis Miller]] and [[George Carlin]].<ref>http://www.shadowculture.com/adman/admn1129.html</ref> This ubiquitous presence on television lead to an inevitable spillage over into pop culture for a brief time.

* <s>The article is, in my opinion, simply too long; we're looking at 72K (~12,000 words) of prose. The "Legacy" section, in particular, is ripe for splitting out into a separate [[Legacy of the Korean War]] article, with a much shorter summary left in the main one.</s>

* <s>"Korean War (1950 – 1953)" should really be something like "Course of the war"; you probably don't want to repeat the article title as a section heading.</s>

* The citations need cleanup; at a minimum, all of the embedded external links should be converted to footnotes. There are also a number of "citation needed" tags floating around. Beyond that, more thorough citation would be appropriate throughout the article; see [[WP:MILHIST#CITE]] for some guidelines.

* <s>The "Depictions" section should be turned into prose, rather than a laundry list of films; see also [[WP:MILHIST#POP]].</s>

* <s>The "Names" section, as it's presently constituted, would work much better as a narrow sidebar; it's of some interest, but I doubt there's enough material to sustain a separate section.</s>

* <s>The "See also" section should be eliminated. If something isn't worth linking from the text, it's generally not worth linking at all. </s>

* <s>The rump "Bibliography" section should be removed as well.</s>

* The "External links" section could use trimming.

Hope that helps! [[User:Kirill Lokshin|Kirill]] 04:08, 13 July 2007 (UTC)<s>cool</s>

::Thank you very much for offering your opinion! [[User:Mr. Killigan|Mr. Killigan]] 00:57, 14 July 2007 (UTC)

By the early 2000s, the steep discounts were no longer offered, and they saw rate increases as much as 80% in fall 2002, with 10-10-321 going from 10 cents a minute to 18 cents on [[October 1]]. A year earlier, a 9.9% "Universal Service Fund" charge had been added.<ref name="ca" /> The television advertising has since become much less common.

==References==

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==Extrenal links==

*[http://www.1010321.com/ 1010321.com]

*[http://www.theonion.com/content/node/27089 10-10 Mania] Contemporary satire of the craze by [[The Onion]]

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