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<font color=midnightblue>QUESTION A</font><br/><font color=midnightblue>The Earth's atmosphere has no definite boundary, slowly becoming thinner until <br/>it fades into outer space. Three-quarters of the atmosphere's mass, however, is <br/>contained within the first 11 kilometres of the planet's surface.</font>

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<font color=darkgreen>SOLUTION</font> </div><div class="NavContent" style="text-align:left; display: none;"><b><font color=green>The Earth's atmosphere has no definite boundary, slowly becoming thinner until <br/>it fades into outer space. Three-quarters of the atmosphere's mass</font><font color=crimson><s>, however,</s></font><font color=green> is <br/>contained within the first 11 kilometres of the planet's surface.<br/></font></b>

*</b></b>The second sentence just adds more information, so "however", with its commas, <br/>should be removed.</div>

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<font color=midnightblue>QUESTION B</font><br/><font color=midnightblue>He is the elder brother of Oasis frontman Liam Gallagher and they are <br/>well-known as squabbling siblings.</font>

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<font color=darkgreen>SOLUTION</font> </div><div class="NavContent" style="text-align:left; display: none;"><b><font color=green>He is the elder brother of Oasis frontman Liam Gallaghe</font><font color=crimson>r; t</font><font color=darkgreen>hey are <br/>well-known as squabbling siblings.<br/></bfont></b>

*In most contexts, announcing that they're brothers and telling us that they squabble will be too different to belong in the one sentence, particularly a short one. Inserting a comma before "and" would be better than nothing, but a semicolon instead of "and" provides a more distinct boundary between the ideas.

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<font color=midnightblue>QUESTION C</font><br/><font color=midnightblue>The accusations were largely directed towards senior civil servants, particularly in the <br/>Home Office, but also included officers of the diplomatic corps.</font>

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<font color=green>SOLUTION</font> </div><div class="NavContent" style="text-align:left; display: none;"><b><font color=green>The accusations were largely directed towards senior civil servants, particularly in the <br/>Home Office, </font><font color=crimson><s>but also</s> </font><font color=saddlebrown>and</font><font color=darkgreen> included officers of the diplomatic corps.<br/></font color></b>

*</font></font><font color=black></b></b>The relationship is additive, not contrastive.

*"Largely" already indicates that the accusations were directed at other people as well.

*Therefore "and", not "but" should link to what is simply additional, expected information.

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<font color=midnightblue>QUESTION D<br/>The ranges of ''L. raniformis'' and ''L. castanea'' overlap with that of the Green and <br/>Golden Bell Frog, and the general body shape and coloration of the three species are similar.</font>

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<font color=darkgreen>SOLUTION</font></div><div class="NavContent" style="text-align:left; display: none;"><b><br/><font color=green>The ranges of ''L. raniformis'' and ''L. castanea'' overlap with that of the Green and <br/>Golden Bell Fro</font><font color=crimson>g; t</font><font color=green>he general body shape and coloration of the three species are similar.<br/></font></b>

*</b></b>Again, the two clauses are too different to be linked with a comma + ''and</font>''.

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<font color=midnightblue>QUESTION E<br/>He formed several bands while at high school: the first, <br/>The Shadow Blasters, was short-lived, but the second, The <br/>Golden Chords, lasted longer.</font></div>

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<b><font color=black>HINT</font><br/></b>

*</b>How are the two clauses related?

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<font color=darkgreen>SOLUTION </font></div><div class="NavContent" style="text-align:left; display: none;"><b><font color=darkgreen>He formed several bands while at high school: the first, <br/>The Shadow Blasters, was short-live</font><font color=crimson>d; t</font><font color=darkgreen>he second, The <br/>Golden Chords, lasted longer.</font></b>

*</b>Since the second clause in no way contradicts the first, comma + "and", or a semicolon will do the trick.

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