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:Chaveso seems semi-responsible. I think his point was not in the proper context, so I rewrote the paragraph to give it proper context. His paragraph works as a few words with some references. The section wasn't too well written, and, as usual, the topic page would be a lot better if people devoted as much time to editing it, instead of the discussion page.--[[User:Dr.michael.benjamin|Dr.michael.benjamin]] 07:11, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
== Terri Schiavo ==
I was wondering if you could take a look at the [[Terri Schiavo#Five years of family conflict]]? I think that the section is too long because, in effect, Terri's diagnosis and her legal status at the end of the 5 year period is the same as at the beginning. All the back-and-forth of the family legal conflict seems to me to be a lot of detail that does not advance the story. Do you think that the section could simply be condensed to simply a complete diagnosis and a factoring out of the family conflict onto a separate page? We can retain citations that support the diagnosis, but the rest of the legal details are, in terms of the story, inconclusive.
Also: if you could take a look at [[Henrietta Lacks]], I would like your opinion on how that article is currently balanced. In particular, as a biography, we do not learn a lot about Lacks while she was alive compared to the amount of space spent on her legacy. In particular, the "medical science" content belongs on the HeLa article. I feel that both the Lacks and the Schiavo biographies are not about medical science; they are about medical ethics. I think that you can help to separate out the two issues so that the stories are properly balanced to emphasize the legal and ethical aspects.--[[User:Straightpress|Straightpress]] 15:25, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
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