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*<font color=chocolate>'''The MOS breach:'''<font color=black> Slashes are '''[[Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style#Slashes|usually avoided]]'''.
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Incorporating a number of new developments in British steam locomotive technology, the ''Packets'' were amongst the first British designs to utilise welding in the construction process, which meant that components could be more easily constructed during the wartime austerity and post-war economy.
The locomotives also featured Bulleid's innovative, though controversial [[Bulleid chain-driven valve gear|chain-driven valve gear]] and the inclusion of [[thermic syphons]]. The class members were named after the Merchant Navy shipping lines involved in the [[Battle of the Atlantic]], and latterly those which used [[Southampton Docks]], an astute publicity masterstroke by the Southern Railway, who operated Southampton Docks during the period.
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