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'''Notes'''

*<font color=teal>'''"Amongst"'''<font color=black> is better as the plainer and shorter <font color=teal>'''"among"'''<font color=black>.

*The second occurrence of <font color=purple>'''"British"'''</font color=black> can be simply removed, because we already know that the technology is British.

*<font color=chocolate>'''"Utilise"'''<font color=black> is a very ugly word for <font color=chocolate>'''"use"'''<font color=black>.

*The second occurrence of <font color=purple>'''"construction/edconstructed"'''</font color> is avoided by substituting it with <font color=purple>'''fabrication"'''</font color>.

*<font color=darkgreen>'''"Post-war"'''<font color=black> is a double adjective before "economy", and should therefore be hyphenated.

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