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==Short exercisesexamples I==

===Exercise 1===

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|1=Hint 1

|2=*One puncuation issue; one.
*One issue concerning the "since" wording.

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|1=Hint 2

|2=*"fromFrom" is spelled out,; anddo thewe reader"say" isto then less preparedourselves "to" subsitutewhen thewe en dash forread "to1964–1979";?

*Which two words in the second clause are unnecessary.?

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|1=Solution

|2=He was a teen pop idol from '''<font color=red><s>1964–1979</s></font> <font color=darkgreen>1964 to 1979</font>''', and '''<font color=red><s>since then he</s></font> <font color=darkgreen>has since</font>''' forged a career as an adult contemporary singer.

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|1=Explanation

|2=*"Then" is unnecessary if "since" is there; "he" can be removed through [[Ellipsis (linguistics)|ellipsis]].

*The second "he" can be removed through [[Ellipsis (linguistics)|ellipsis]]—that is, it's at the very start and the reader will silently carry it over into the second clause if it's removed; oddly enough, this ''helps'' the cohesion of the text by forcing the reader to psyhologically bind together the two clauses.

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