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|1=Hints

|2=*Is "were" still the right tense?

*Was the nation was an increasing welfare state? That's what it ''could'' be saying—the reader has to think too hard about this.

*"With" as a connector is often awkward.

*Do you ''increase'' a welfare state?

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|2=The welfare state bit is only one way of clarifying it.

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===Exercise 4: Committee grows tired of chairman===