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—[[User:Player017|017Bluefield]] ([[User talk:Player017|talk]]) 06:35, 3 August 2016 (UTC)

:Keep an eye on his contributions, and if he vandalises again, <nowiki>{{ping|ProgrammingGeek}}</nowiki> ping me. '''<span style="color:Green">Programming</span><span style="color:Orange">Geek</span>''' ([[User:ProgrammingGeek|Page!]] • [[User talk:ProgrammingGeek|Talk!]] • [[Special:Contributions/ProgrammingGeek|Contribs!]]) 07:21, 3 August 2016 (UTC)

==Help with an article you're reviewed ==

Hi ProgrammingGeek, you've reviewed this article which I posted [[JSCAPE]] and flagged it for improvement as it is written like an advertisement. When drafting this article I used info available on web in several place which I used as references. I would appreciate any feedback on what items I could update or remove to make this article aligned to Wikipedia guidelines and not to sound like an ad. Can you please let me know? Thanks. --[[User:Laviniaknowswiki|Laviniaknowswiki]] ([[User talk:Laviniaknowswiki|talk]]) 23:20, 9 August 2016 (UTC)

: Hi [[User:Laviniaknowswiki]], Here's an example of what I was talking about:

In 2016, JSCAPE embarked in a partnership with Stonebranch, a modern workload automation solution provider. This strategic technology partnership was formed to deliver a network solution called Universal Data Mover Gateway (UDM Gateway), which has the ability to manage the flow of business critical data between organizations and their external trading partners.

Instead, to make this more neutral, try:

In 2016, JSCAPE formed a partnership with workload automation provider Stonebranch. This partnership was created to make a product known as Universal Data Mover Gateway (UDM Gateway), which manages the flow of important data between organisations.

It seems less promotional and has less flowery language. Thanks, '''<span style="color:Green">Programming</span><span style="color:Orange">Geek</span>''' ([[User:ProgrammingGeek|Page!]] • [[User talk:ProgrammingGeek|Talk!]] • [[Special:Contributions/ProgrammingGeek|Contribs!]]) 17:32, 11 August 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for your feedback. I'll update the page soon. --[[User:Laviniaknowswiki|Laviniaknowswiki]] ([[User talk:Laviniaknowswiki|talk]]) 03:35, 12 August 2016 (UTC)