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*A word that is probably redundant.
*Insufficient commas (three could be added).
*A word that is inconsistently applied in one place but not another.
*A potentially misleading lexical item.
*A verb is used wrongly in active voice.
*A hyphen is required for a double adjective.
*A character that may need to be changed in case (upper to lower, or lower to upper).
*The case of an initial character requires consideration.
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<font color=black>SOLUTION 12a: AgricultureJane continuesZhang to be a major part of the economy of Somerset.(born Apple11 orchardsOctober <br/>1984)<font color=red><s> were once, plentiful</s><font color=brownblack>also haveknown beenas plentifulZhang forLiangying<font more than five centuriescolor=red>, <font color=black>is and<br/>a toChinese thispop daysinger thewho countycame isto <fontprominence color=red><s>linkedwhen to</s>she <font color=browndimgray>knownwas placed for<font color=black>third in the production2005 season of strong cider. The unemployment rate in the countySuper is lower thanGirl <font color=browndarkgreen>that ofContest<font color=black> the surrounding counties. The largest employment sectors are retail, manufacturing, <font color=red><s>leisure/tourism</s>, <font color=brownblack>leisurea andnational tourism<font color=blackpurple>all-female<font color=brownblack>, singing competition <font color=blackchocolate>and held<font color=redblack>< in the People's>health/social careRepublic of China. </s>font color=teal>Throughout<font color=brownblack>health the competition, she sang in English, Spanish and social[[Cantonese (linguistics)|Cantonese]] in addition to [[Standard Mandarin|Mandarin]] care<font color=black>.</bred>Chinese<font color=black>.
*<font color=red>'''Three commas''' <font color=black>are required
*'''The problem of logic and of vagueness:''' "Once" suggests that the orchards were plentiful at some time in the past and are no longer so; but the subsequent clause implies that plentiful orchards have ever since been and still are plentiful, since the county is known for its apple cider. An indication is required of when "in the past" this was, even if as vague as "for at least five centuries". We have guessed a solution; the author would need to be asked to check this. <font color=black>
*<font color=dimgray>'''The verb "placed"''' <font color=black>is transitive, is used wrongly in active voice.
*'''The wrong lexical item:''' "Linked to" is ambiguous; "known for" is presumably what the author intended. <font color=black>
*<font color=purple>'''A hyphen''' <font color=black>is required for a double adjective.
*'''The false comparison:''' The unemployment rate in Somerset is being compared with the unemployment rate in the surrounding counties, not with the counties themselves; "that of" can be inserted to stand for "the unemployment rate of" those other counties; then the comparison is valid.<font color=black>
*<font color=darkgreen>'''An upper-case "C"''' <font color=black>is required
*'''The MOS breach:''' Slashes are [[Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style#Slashes|usually avoided]].
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