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<font color=black>Agriculture continues to be a major part of the economy of Somerset. <br/>Apple orchards <br/>were once plentiful, and to this day the county is linked to the production of strong cider. The unemployment rate in the county is lower than the surrounding counties. The largest employment sectors are retail, manufacturing, leisure/tourism and health/social care.

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<font color=black>The four issues are as follows.

*A wrong lexical item (which needs to be substituted with a more appropriate item).

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<font color=black>Agriculture continues to be a major part of the economy of Somerset. <br/>Apple orchards<font color=red><br/> were once plentiful, and <font color=black> and to this day the county is <font color=darkgreen>linked to <font color=black>the production of strong cider. The unemployment rate in the county is <font color=purple>lower than the<font color=black> surrounding counties. The largest employment sectors are retail, manufacturing, <font color=chocolate>leisure/tourism <font color=black>and <font color=chocolate>health/social<font color=black> care.

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<font color=black>Agriculture continues to be a major part of the economy of Somerset. <br/>Apple orchards <br/><font color=red>'''<s>were once plentiful</s> have been plentiful for more than five centuries,'''<font color=black> and to this day the county is <font color=darkgreen>'''<s>linked to</s> known for'''<font color=black> the production of strong cider. The unemployment rate in the county is lower than <font color=purple>'''that of'''<font color=black> the surrounding counties. The largest employment sectors are retail, manufacturing, <font color=chocolate>'''<s>leisure/tourism</s> leisure and tourism,''' <font color=black>and <font color=chocolate>'''<s>health/social care</s> health and social care'''<font color=black>.</b><font color=black>

*<font color=red>'''The problem of logic and of vagueness: "Once"'''<font color=black> suggests that the orchards were plentiful at some time in the past and are no longer so; but the subsequent clause implies that plentiful orchards have ever since been and still are plentiful, since the county is known for its apple cider. An indication is required of when "in the past" this was, even if as vague as <font color=red>'''"for at least five centuries"'''<font color=black>. We have guessed a solution; the author would need to be asked to check this.