User:Tony1/Advanced editing exercises: Difference between revisions

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*<font color=darkgreen>'''An upper-case "C"''' <font color=black>is required, for <font color=darkgreen>'''"Contest"'''<font color=black>, since it's part of the title of the competition; this can be confirmed at the linked article and the link re-piped.

*<font color=chocolate>'''"Held"''' <font color=black>is hardly necessary, since all competitions are held, and we're told its country of ___location.

*<font color=teal>'''"Throughout"'''<font color=black> may imply that she sang from start to finish in a mixture of all four languages; while this is an unlikely meaning, it wouldis clearer to use <font color=teal>'''"during"'''<font color=black>, which doesn't carryconvey the same start-to-finish meaning.

*<font color=maroon>'''"Chinese"''' <font color=black>is used to qualify "Mandarin", but not "Cantonese"; however, both are Chinese languages. It's probably acceptable to remove <font color=maroon>'''"Chinese"''' <font color=black>altogether, since China is central to the topic and both languages were linked. Re-pipe the link.

*There's one more issue: the list of languages at the end finishes with "in addition to"; just why this this ''marked'' form of "and" is used is unclear. Is Mandarin somehow different from the rest of the list? Perhaps it's her native language, but it's all a mystery to the poor reader.