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Thanks for the pointers. I'll be sure to make an account in the coming days. Have a great night! <small>—Preceding [[Wikipedia:Signatures|unsigned]] comment added by [[Special:Contributions/24.223.206.174|24.223.206.174]] ([[User talk:24.223.206.174|talk]]) 02:57, 8 August 2008 (UTC)</small><!-- Template:UnsignedIP --> <!--Autosigned by SineBot-->
== Introduction ==
The introduction in this article is poor. When I open this page I want to know what the heck cloud computing is, I'm not interested in some etymological deliberation of the origins of the word. <small>—Preceding [[Wikipedia:Signatures|unsigned]] comment added by [[Special:Contributions/83.89.0.118|83.89.0.118]] ([[User talk:83.89.0.118|talk]]) 23:19, 21 June 2008 (UTC)</small><!-- Template:UnsignedIP --> <!--Autosigned by SineBot-->
: Hopefully you are happier with the introduction now. [[User:SamJohnston|samj]] ([[User talk:SamJohnston|talk]]) 09:17, 1 August 2008 (UTC)
:: The improvements are appreciated, but I think the initial paragraph remains too reliant on technical buzzwords for a general-use encyclopedia. E.g, consider the simpler ZDNet definition [http://dictionary.zdnet.com/definition/cloud+computing.html]. Not only is it more approachable, but also gives the specific example of Google Apps. The casual reader should not have to look up several unfamiliar hotlinked terms to get the initial concept. The technical detail can be retained but the initial paragraph should be restructured similar to the 2nd ZDNet definition. That way casual readers can quickly grasp the concept, yet those with deeper more technical interest can read further. [[User:Joema|Joema]] ([[User talk:Joema|talk]]) 16:48, 5 August 2008 (UTC)
::: Ok I've included the apps example, "in the cloud", etc. but this 'dumbing down' is not necessarily accurate... for example cloud computing is not restricted to applications running 'in or from network servers' (eg peer-to-peer, unless you're calling the other clients 'network servers'), and where is the application running anyway when the vast majority of the action is in javascript sent to the browser (eg Google Apps)? Anyway we're getting there now - it's a lot better than it was. [[User:SamJohnston|samj]] ([[User talk:SamJohnston|talk]]) 06:20, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
The very first sentence in this article is hard to read (I also believe it is off-topic):
''The term Cloud Computing derives from the common depiction in most technology architecture diagrams, of the Internet or IP availability, using an illustration of a cloud.''
The article should begin with an accepted definition of 'Cloud Computing'. As it stands, the rest of the article is as vague as the topic itself. <small>—Preceding [[Wikipedia:Signatures|unsigned]] comment added by [[Special:Contributions/89.167.185.18|89.167.185.18]] ([[User talk:89.167.185.18|talk]]) 12:36, 25 June 2008 (UTC)</small><!-- Template:UnsignedIP --> <!--Autosigned by SineBot-->
yes!The article should really begin with accepted defination as the defination mentioned in the article is imprecise(indistinct) and hard to read. [[User:Anoopnair2050|Anoopnair2050]] ([[User talk:Anoopnair2050|talk]]) 15:19, 28 July 2008 (UTC)
(Hopefully) fixed now. [[User:SamJohnston|samj]] ([[User talk:SamJohnston|talk]]) 09:18, 1 August 2008 (UTC)
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