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:: If you want, even code like {{bcode|1=<font color=darkgreen>'''This text is dark green AND bold.'''</font>}} can be converted to a template, like {{bcode|1=<nowiki>{{bold and colored|darkgreen|This text is dark green AND bold.}}</nowiki>}}, but that's up to you. If you check the History, you'll see that using the templates decreases the size of the page; the page size for [[User:Tony1/Know your Manual of Style]], which I just converted, has decreased by 33%. <font face="Verdana">[[User:Gary King|<font color="#02b">Gary <b>King</b></font>]] ([[User talk:Gary King|<font color="#02e">talk</font>]])</font> 20:26, 14 February 2009 (UTC)
== Suggestions re Wind power and SR Merchant Navy Class ==
(1) Under Wind power, don't both the proposed solutions treat the plurality of the subject inconsistently?
:Solution 1: ''Three-blade wind turbines '''are''' the most common design for modern windmills, as '''it''' minimises forces related to material fatigue.''
:Solution 2: ''Three blades minimise forces related to material fatigue, and '''are''' the most common '''design''' for modern wind turbines'' <small>(period missing in original)</small>
For what it's worth, my solution was along the lines of, ''The most common design for modern windmills is a three-blade turbine, minimising forces related to material fatigue'', though I realise this changes the meaning slightly.
(2) Can we really be sure that the second "British" in the first part of "SR Merchant Navy Class" is redundant? ("''Incorporating a number of new developments in British steam locomotive technology, the Packets were amongst the first British designs to utilise welding...''") To me the word excludes the real possibility that the new British technology had already been used in an allied locomotive.
(3) The same exercise promises some underlining which is not yet present.
<small>(btw I also left a comment at [[User_talk:Tony1/Redundancy_exercises:_removing_fluff_from_your_writing]].)</small>
[[User:Adrian J. Hunter|Adrian '''J.''' Hunter]]<sup>([[User talk:Adrian J. Hunter|talk]]•[[Special:contributions/Adrian J. Hunter|contribs]])</sup> 14:21, 22 September 2009 (UTC)
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