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::::The changes look good to me, both here and at the redundancy exercises. I like the commentary on theme. Thanks for responding to my badgering :) [[User:Adrian J. Hunter|Adrian '''J.''' Hunter]]<sup>([[User talk:Adrian J. Hunter|talk]]•[[Special:contributions/Adrian J. Hunter|contribs]])</sup> 14:40, 23 September 2009 (UTC)
== Excercise 6 ==
Great job, I love doing these! For excercise 6 I thought:
"A protest grou<font color=red>'''p, <s>was</s> f'''</font>ormed to resist the proposed construction, <font color=red>'''<s>which</s>''' </font> attracted support from botanist and environmental campaigner David Bellamy."
I would refer to that it is logical that the group was founded after/because of the proposal, so "was" would be redundant, and with an extra comma, but fewer words the message still stands clear. (PS: you've written "font colo'''u'''r", with a ''u'' so the corrected text is black, not red) --Regards, [[User:Mottenen|Mottenen]] ([[User talk:Mottenen|talk]]) 20:23, 16 March 2011 (UTC)
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