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|1=Hint 1

|2=The problem lies inWhat's the relationship between the two clauses. (either side of the comma)? How are these statements connected logically?

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{{editing exercise

|1=Hint 2

|2=Joining the two statements with "and" belies the causality: it's ''because'' they'd won five consecutive elections that they'd been in power so long. But don't use "because".

|2=The second statement is so strongly foreshadowed by the first that the A + B relationship ("and") makes them too distinct.

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{{editing exercise

|1=Solution

|2=The Liberal Party had governed the nation since 1935, <font color=reddarkgreen>'''<s>and had</s></font><font color=red> having'''</font> won five consecutive elections.

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{{editing exercise

|1=Explanation

|2=Now the causal logic is clear.

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===Exercise 3===