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:Mottenan, they're too hard for ''me'', some of them. Seriously, I forget the mechanics of each after a while; perhaps I need to brush up on my editing skills by revisiting. Thanks for your comment and for picking up my engvar glitch. Retroactive inhibition, I think the psychologists call it. [[User:Tony1|<font color="darkgreen">'''Tony'''</font >]] [[User talk:Tony1|<font color="darkgreen">(talk)</font >]] 12:43, 17 March 2011 (UTC) PS I do think the meaning is different if "was" is removed. Without "was", the group seems to have self-formed; with it, there's some kind of agent that/who formed the group. [[User:Tony1|<font color="darkgreen">'''Tony'''</font >]] [[User talk:Tony1|<font color="darkgreen">(talk)</font >]] 12:48, 17 March 2011 (UTC)

::Yeah, maybe. It doesn't quite sound like that to me, but maybe I'm just not used to go that much into details when writing English. Anyway, it doesn't really matter, I just wanted to know if there was a specific reason you'd phrased it in that way, and yes there was :) --[[User:Mottenen|Mottenen]] ([[User talk:Mottenen|talk]]) 19:03, 17 March 2011 (UTC)

== On: Ms Ima Hogg ==

With the sentence out of context as it is, it almost seems that it would be alright to say "''to design '''the''' house''" as the reader of the exercise might not know that this particular house "''is one of a class of houses that could be designed for that purpose, not the only one.''" You could then come up with a solution such as:

*"Ima worked closely with architect John Staub to design the house to show off the art the family had purchased."

Which brings me to another point, in the solution given, I found two other words that could possibly be omitted: the "'''the'''" before "''art''", and "'''had'''" after "''family''", and came up with:

*"Ima worked closely with architect John Staub to design a house that would show off art the family purchased."

[[User:L1ght5h0w|L1ght5h0w]] ([[User talk:L1ght5h0w|talk]]) 18:50, 5 June 2012 (UTC)