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*"Ima worked closely with architect John Staub to design a house that would show off art the family purchased."
[[User:L1ght5h0w|L1ght5h0w]] ([[User talk:L1ght5h0w|talk]]) 18:50, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
== HMS ''Agincourt'' ==
The (revised) sentence reads:
{{Since Brazil's relations with Argentina were warming and the country's economic boom was losing steam, the government negotiated with Armstrong to remove the third dreadnought from the contract.}}
Out of context, it's unclear to me whether 'the county' and 'the government' refer to Brazil or Argentina.
I wonder if something like this would be more clear:
{{While Brazil's economy was losing steam, its relations with Argentina were warming. This led the Brazilian government to request that Armstrong remove the third dreadnought from the contract.}}
I'm sure you can improve on what I've written, but I hope my point is clear. :) [[User:SashaMarievskaya|SashaMarievskaya]] ([[User talk:SashaMarievskaya|talk]]) 04:27, 5 June 2013 (UTC)
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