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::''Hey ya'll, I copy and pasted the above blurb from your "Socio-Ecological Model" section. I would suggest incorporating it into the introduction, as it is general and descriptive enough to give readers a quick idea of community-based program design and how it differs from other forms of program design.'' --[[User:Ubuntu713|Ubuntu713]] ([[User talk:Ubuntu713|talk]]) 23:49, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
:::Thanks, Ubuntu! I've incorporated your suggestion. [[User:Umich hudsonmh|Umich hudsonmh]] ([[User talk:Umich hudsonmh|talk]]) 21:57, 14 March 2014 (UTC)
::''Additionally, the introductory definition of community-based program design seems a bit clunky and utilizes unaccessible language that is not linked to other wikipedia pages. Maybe try looking for and using a more succinct definition.''--[[User:Ubuntu713|Ubuntu713]] ([[User talk:Ubuntu713|talk]]) 00:01, 10 March 2014 (UTC)
:::Thanks again. The page is starting to take shape! [[User:Umich hudsonmh|Umich hudsonmh]] ([[User talk:Umich hudsonmh|talk]]) 21:57, 14 March 2014 (UTC)
::"I agree with the comments above. It might be best to start the intro with a sentence that gives the main goal of community-based program design. Then in the following sentences you can briefly touch on who utilizes this program design and perhaps briefly introduce a few of the tools you mention later on..." [[User:Millelin|Millelin]] ([[User talk:Millelin|talk]]) 01:47, 11 March 2014 (UTC)
:::Thanks, Millelin. [[User:Umich hudsonmh|Umich hudsonmh]] ([[User talk:Umich hudsonmh|talk]]) 21:57, 14 March 2014 (UTC)
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