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===Exercise 2: sentence length===

Each of these sentences is too long. Typically, the author has tried to cram too many related ideas into the sentence. For each exercise, identify these ideas, and decide where and how to split up the sentence for easier reading. The "where" is easy enough—aim for roughly equal parts either side of the split; the "how" is more challenging—sometimes you'll have to change the grammar a little.

For each question, hit "<font color=blue>[Show]"<font> in the upper box to reveal a hint. Then hit <font color=blue>[Show]"<font> in the lower box to reveal the solution.

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<font color=green>QUESTION A</font><br/>Gregorian chant is the best-known repertory of plainchant, a form of monophonic, unaccompanied sacred song, which was <br/>developed in the Catholic Church, mainly in western and central Europe during the period 800–1000, with later additions and redactions.

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<b><font color=green>HINT</font><br/>Gregorian chant is the best-known repertory of plainchant, a form of monophonic, unaccompanied sacred so<font color=red>ng, which</font> was <br/>developed in the Catholic Church, mainly in western and central Europe during the period 800–1000, with later additions and redactions.

A good ___location for a break is about half-way through (red). You ''could'' start your new, second sentence with "This ...", but that word could refer back to any singular item in the first sentence: "Gregorian chant", "best-know repertory", "plainchant", or "a form of monophonic, unaccompanied sacred song". To make it clear, you'll need to restate one of these items at the start of the new sentence.

"The Prime Minister" ''is'' an individual, so there's no need to tell us explicitly.

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<bfont color=green>SOLUTION</font> A<br/div><div class="NavContent" style="text-align:left; display: none;"><b>Gregorian chant is the best-known repertory of plainchant, a form of monophonic, unaccompanied sacred so<font color=red>ng. Plainchant</font> <br/>was developed in the Catholic Church, mainly in western and central Europe during the period 800–1000, with later additions and redactions.</b>

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<b>SOLUTION A<br/>Gregorian chant is the best-known repertory of plainchant, a form of monophonic, unaccompanied sacred so<font color=red>ng. Plainchant</font> <br/>was developed in the Catholic Church, mainly in western and central Europe during the period 800–1000, with later additions and redactions.</b>

"The Prime Minister" ''is'' an individual, so there's no need to tell us explicitly.

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