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<font color=green>SOLUTION</font> </div><div class="NavContent" style="text-align:left; display: none;"><b>The accusations were largely directed towards senior civil servants, particularly in the <br/>Home Office, <font color=crimson><s>but also</s> and</font> included officers of the diplomatic core.</b>

*The relationship is additive, not contrastive—contrastive.
*"largelyLargely" already indicates that <br/>the accusations were directed at othersother people as well as those in the Home Office.

*Therefore, "and", not "but" should link to what is simply additional, expected information.

*As usual, "also" adds nothing and should be removed.

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[[Image:White p.jpg|thumb|right|250px|[[Brett Whiteley]]'s painting of Australian novelist [[Patrick White]] on the cover of his biography. White's acerbic, highly original use of the English language won him the 1973 [[Nobel Prize for Literature]], "for an epic and psychological narrative art, which has introduced a new continent into literature".]]

===Exercise 4: commas===