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#Is it '''reasonably well written'''?
#::'''Lead'''
#:: "Community-based program design is a social program design" - two uses of 'program design' within seven words reads poorly.<
#::"This program design approach depends on the participatory approach" - same issue with two uses of the word 'approach' within six words.
#::<s>"One advantage is a learning experience between a consumer and a social services provider.[2] One disadvantage is a limited availability of resources" - merge this into one sentence.</s>
#::"The models that can be used for it are ..." I can honestly say this is the longest single sentence I've ever seen on Wikipedia. You need to break it up.
#::<s>"the change around us" - is 'us' the right word here? Would it be better as the change around 'the community', or just 'the change'?</s>
#::'''History'''
#::<s>"by quoting Harper (1990) regarding" - this isn't a university essay. We don't quote sources on Wikipedia like this. I suggest rewording it to something like 'by quoting a 1990 [whatever the medium was, i.e journal] by [author's full name]"</s>
#::Try and avoid one-sentence paragraphs if you can. Can you expand the final paragraph somehow?
#::'''Program design tools'''
#::' "if-then" (causal)' - instead of explaining causal in brackets, wikilink 'if-then' to something appropriate, like [[Conditional (computer programming)]] or [[Causality]]
#:: <s>"are to: 1) recognize" - don't number things like this in standard prose.</s>
#Is it '''factually accurate''' and '''[[Wikipedia:Verifiability|verifiable]]'''?
#:A. Has an [[Wikipedia:LAYOUT#Standard_appendices_and_footers|appropriate reference section]]: {{GAList/check|?}}
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