Talk:Community-based program design/GA2: Difference between revisions

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#Is it '''reasonably well written'''?

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#:: <s>"Community-based program design is a social program design" - two uses of 'program design' within seven words reads poorly.</s>

#::<s>"This program design approach depends on the participatory approach" - same issue with two uses of the word 'approach' within six words.</s>

#::<s>"One advantage is a learning experience between a consumer and a social services provider.[2] One disadvantage is a limited availability of resources" - merge this into one sentence.</s>

#::"The models that can be used for it are ..." I can honestly say this is the longest single sentence I've ever seen on Wikipedia. You need to break it up.