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Be advised rather than bringing up any minor issues I will just fix them myself. If you're unhappy with any changes I make simply revert them and we can instead discuss the issue here. Also feel free to reply to my concerns as they come in; don't feel like you have to wait for the entire review to be finished. [[User:Freikorp|Freikorp]] ([[User talk:Freikorp|talk]]) 08:18, 9 May 2017 (UTC)
#Is it '''reasonably well written'''? {{GAList/check|?}}
#::'''Lead'''
#::<s>"Community-based program design is a social program design" - two uses of 'program design' within seven words reads poorly.</s>
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#:: <s>"are to: 1) recognize" - don't number things like this in standard prose.</s>
#Is it '''factually accurate''' and '''[[Wikipedia:Verifiability|verifiable]]'''?
#:A. Has an [[Wikipedia:LAYOUT#Standard_appendices_and_footers|appropriate reference section]]: {{GAList/check|
#::<s>The Sternin source needs to state the publisher and/or journal.</s>
#::<s>The McCawley source looks like it could use more parameters, either the journal or an accessdate.</s>
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#::<s>Regarding the model image - what is this images source? Is it based on information specifically found in source No. 2 (being the only source in the 'Socio-ecological model' sub-section)? I'm not an expert on image licensing, but if it isn't based on a specific source, I think this image would constitute as original research. Also you could probably make a better version of it in a program like [[Microsoft Paint]]. The text doesn't appear to be centered all the way down and there are different spaced gaps between the text and the circles. This isn't a fail point in itself, but I definitely think you can make a better image.</s>
#'''Overall''':
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There are a few issues here. I'm placing this on hold to see if they can be addressed. Even if they all are I may ask for a second opinion as I've never reviewed a 'Social sciences and society' article before and I'm not really sure if all the major aspects have been covered. [[User:Freikorp|Freikorp]] ([[User talk:Freikorp|talk]]) 10:34, 9 May 2017 (UTC)
:{{ping|Freikorp}} I've fixed some of the issues you mentioned, but I'm a bit busy today, so I will start fixing the rest tomorrow. [[User:Philroc|<font color="#009933">Phil</font>]][[User talk:Philroc|<font color="#000000">roc</font>]]<sup>[[Special:Contributions/Philroc|''My contribs'']]</sup> 17:48, 9 May 2017 (UTC)
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::::::{{ping|Freikorp}} I'll see how my schedule works out. [[User:Philroc|<font color="#009933">Phil</font>]][[User talk:Philroc|<font color="#000000">roc</font>]]<sup>[[Special:Contributions/Philroc|''My contribs'']]</sup> 01:28, 19 May 2017 (UTC)
:::::::No worries. I'm going away for the weekend so won't be able to reply to comments here. I have to draw the line somewhere; if an appropriate, sourced expansion hasn't been made by Monday morning (UTC+10:00) I'll close the nomination. Also don't forget the really long sentence in the lead still needs to be broken up/reworded. [[User:Freikorp|Freikorp]] ([[User talk:Freikorp|talk]]) 14:29, 19 May 2017 (UTC)
:::::::Closing as no further edits have been made to the article. You have done some great work improving the article since the last GA nomination. I'm sure if you apply the same level of improvements again this article will pass a third nomination. [[User:Freikorp|Freikorp]] ([[User talk:Freikorp|talk]]) 03:22, 22 May 2017 (UTC)
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