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== Copyedit ==
{{ping|Miniapolis}} Thanks for taking this one on. I know it is difficult to copyedit technical articles.
There are a few things I want to undo unless you have some better wording;
* {{xt|A phenomenon that is much used...}} to {{!xt|A common phenomenon...}}
*: It is the use that is common, not the phenomenon itself
* {{xt|...with entirely incorrect results.}} to {{!xt|...yielding incorrect results.}}
*: This is too weak a statement to my mind. The results are worse than just inaccurate. At this wavelength the nature of componenents can completely change—capacitors appear to be inductors and open circuits suddenly look like short circuits.
* {{xt|...entirely characterised by its length and [[characteristic impedance]].}} to {{!xt|...characterised by its length and [[characteristic impedance]].}}
*: Dropping the word "entirely" has lost some information. For a complex shape like a wine glass, I need the entire geometry to calculate the note it will resonate at. For an organ pipe, I only need the length. For the wine glass, the note is characterised (in part) by its height, but not ''entirely'' so.
* {{xt|Commensurate line circuits are important because they have an established design theory.}} to {{!xt|Commensurate line circuits are important here because of their design;...}}
*:The change has resulted in bland statement with little information. The point is that commensurate line theory provides a procedure that will guarantee a circuit with the prescribed response. It is a ''synthesis'' from a requirement, rather than an ''analysis'' of something that might, or might not, do the job. The change also makes the following statement incorrect {{!xt|...circuits consisting of arbitrary lengths of transmission line (or arbitrary shapes) are not.}} It's a design theory they lack, not importance.
* {{xt|...in order to benefit from the improved quality. Distributed element designs tend to have greater power handling capability.}} to {{!xt|... to benefit from improved quality; distributed element designs tend to have greater power-handling capability.}}
*: These are two entirely unrelated points and should not be run together. The improved quality referred to here is [[Q factor|''Q'' factor]]. I was trying (perhaps inadvisedly) to avoid the use of a technical term. Power handling is a different issue altogether.
* {{xt|...the signal frequencies used on these cables are lower...}} to {{!xt|...its frequencies...}}
*:It is the signal that possesses "frequency", not the cable.
* {{xt|[[Coaxial cable|Coaxial line]]...}} to {{!xt|[[Coaxial cable]]...}} and the same change in the section heading.
*: We should be talking about lines here rather than cables. Devices constructed with coaxial technology are usually solid objects. They are not made of flexible cable. Even plain interconnections between units were, when this technology was dominant, often made with rigid copper pipe structures rather than cable. I know the cable article is hidden behind a pipe, but there is no more suitable article to link to.
That list is longer than I thought it was going to be! Thanks again for your work so far. [[User:Spinningspark|<b style="background:#FAFAD2;color:#C08000">Spinning</b>]][[User talk:Spinningspark|<b style="color:#4840A0">Spark</b>]] 11:55, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
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