Talk:Transitional fossil/GA1

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 20:10, 28 March 2012 (UTC)Reply

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  1. Well-written:
  2. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (prose) Writing is clear and direct. No sign of copyright issues.   Pass
    (b) (MoS) Lead ok. Layout ok. No peacock or weasel language. No embedded lists.   Pass
  3. Verifiable with no original research:
  4. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (references) The reviewer has no notes here.   Undetermined
    (b) (citations to reliable sources) Please see Discussion below. 'Citation needed' tags have been added to article.   On hold
    (c) (original research) The reviewer has no notes here.   Undetermined
  5. Broad in its coverage:
  6. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (major aspects) The key points are covered. The range of examples is suitably wide. Traditional and modern views are explained.   Pass
    (b) (focused) Not sure the Runcaria section really gets across its point. A diagram (cp Runcaria 'seed') comparing it with a modern seed would help.   Neutral
  7. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  8. Notes Result
    Article covers the subject evenly and neutrally.   Pass
  9. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
  10. Notes Result
    Quite intense talk, editing in 2012 with GOCE. Some reversion but no editwarring. Some (perhaps creationist) IP minor edits reverted. Edits in last month all minor except addition of example (A. afarensis).   Pass
  11. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  12. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) All images are from Commons, with (c) tags.   Pass
    (b) (appropriate use with suitable captions) All images captioned. Replaced A. afarensis skull with bipedal skeleton to illustrate text. An image of Runcaria would be useful. It might be helpful to include a historic reconstruction image of Archaeopteryx in the 'History of transitional fossils' section - Commons has some - to show the impact of the 1861 find.   Pass

Result

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  Undetermined The reviewer has no notes here.

Discussion

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Goodness gracious, they really did change up the GA page format! I should do this a bit more often.

I would say in general, you want to have at least one source per paragraph at the GA level. It's good practice: You really can't have too few citations. In particular, I would like to see more citations for the "Transitions in phylognetic nomenclature" and the Australopithecus sections; they seem to be the sparsest sections. If a citation covers more than one sentence, just put it at the end of the paragraph, and that should be fine. I've given several sections a quick copyedit for some grammatical and spelling mistakes, although I feel that the article as a whole could use a bit more fine polishing on the prose. It seems to hit all the spots content-wise though, and the images check out. bibliomaniac15 05:05, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Reply

I agree, and have done another pass this morning. --Stfg (talk) 10:57, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Reply
A few "'Citation needed" tags have been added. What needs to be sourced is self evident in most cases, but there's a couple of points which are not entirely clear:
  • After On the Origin of Species, the idea of "lower animals" representing earlier stages in evolution lingered, as demonstrated in Ernst Haeckel's figure of the human pedigree. This sentence has two pieces of information: The lingering view of "lower animals", and that it can be seen in Haeckels work. There is a figure from Haeckel that illustrate this point, but it's not a source per se. Ideas?
Haeckel published on the subject himself. The idea of the "Great chain of being" is much older, before people thought of evolution (you'll find some sources there... including Lovejoy's book of that name, I read it at uni.) and more on the web under that heading.Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:24, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • At the time it was hailed by many as the "missing link", helping set the term as primarily used for human fossils, though it is sometimes used for other intermediates, like Archaeopteryx. Again, there's two pieces of information: 1) "Missing links" is primarily used for the animal.human transition, and 2) it is also sometimes used for other transitionals. Which one of them is it that needs a source? Petter Bøckman (talk) 09:58, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Reply
Could the ideal answer be "both"? Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:24, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Reply
It could indeed :-) Now, that was that bit of sourcing squared away. It's going to be tough finding some decent sources for the cladistics section though. Petter Bøckman (talk) 18:44, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Reply

Contents There's a lot of good content in the article, but it is (to my mind) not presented in an order that make the article flow naturally. This has been bugging me for some time, I'll take a stab at rearranging it. If mu copyedits is not to peoples liking, feel free to revert my edits, but if so, please give a reason for doing so! Petter Bøckman (talk) 18:52, 30 March 2012 (UTC)Reply

It seems rather strange timing, Petter. What have you in mind? --Stfg (talk) 19:27, 30 March 2012 (UTC)Reply
First off, we need a definition-section, which should be followed by the "science" bits (Limitations of the fossil record, Transitions in phylogenetic nomenclature, Transitional versus ancestral). After that should come the history-section, and the article should round off with the examples. Where the examples overlap with the text in the earlier, the examples should be dealt with in the earlier sections. Per now, we have two sections on Archaeopteryx, which is neither here nor there. I have tried to get some interest in rearranging the the contents before, but with no response, so I decided to be bold and just do it. Seems it was unpopular though. Petter Bøckman (talk) 20:48, 30 March 2012 (UTC)Reply

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