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Joseph Smith, Jr.

This is a very detailed and complete article about Mormon founder Joseph Smith. It is a focal point of WP:LDS and has recently undergone an exemplary and careful splitting process. As stated at Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Early life of Joseph Smith, Jr., we'd like to see an article about Joseph Smith featured on December 23, the 200th anniversary of Smith's birth. Which of these is selected is not very relevant, at least not in my mind, but it has been suggested that this article be nominated as well and they are both worthy candidates. Cookiecaper 00:56, 4 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  1. Great article, almost there. That table at the bottom can be made to look better. deeptrivia (talk) 04:42, 4 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Hmm...what do you suggest? That box is discussed in length at Talk:Joseph Smith, Jr./Archive 3.
  • Support. Well-referenced, NPOV, and interesting. In my internet browser, however, there are slight formatting problems with the infobox at the top. I don't see any problem with the footer box. Also, some related materials could be merged into larger paragraphs. But still, I've modelled other articles (in terms of referencing and format) on this one and its counterpart. Thank you. Saravask 15:54, 4 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • Weak Object. 'Physical characteristics and likeness' section is one sentence, needs merging into another section. The infobox at the top is missing borders and is a bit messed up. The table of contents is quite confusing, it could do with a more logical layout without so many subsections. There is no need for two subsections in the 'Major teachings' section. One sections title is extremely long ('Joseph Smith as a translator and prophet in New York and Pennsylvania'). The article is also too long, at 46KB - I know it has been split up into other articles already, but I think there is still too much detail in some of this article that makes it 46KB. The table at the bottom (as mentioned by deeptrivia) is not very good looking, it should look more like the infobox at the top. Apart from what I'm mentioned, it looks good (the spelling/grammar and references are excellent). — Wackymacs 19:56, 4 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
The Newsweek section was moved to History of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints, as discussed on the talk page back when it was added. I've removed the physical likeness section for now and merged King Follet Discoursewith Major Prophecies, and shortened the long title mentioned above. Much of the article length is due to references, but I'll see if there are some things I can take away. The boxes have not yet been changed; please provide more suggestions on how they can be corrected, especially the box at the bottom. The box at the top is duplicated on the pages of all other Church Presidents as well. Please see those and make suggestions on changes. Thank you deeply. Cookiecaper 01:33, 6 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • object - it's very long, the writing does not seem concise to me. The section on 'physical characteristics' is superfluous, and I think that the paragraph on a Newsweek cover is also not necessary. Generally I think the article needs a once-over by a good copyeditor to improve the sharpness of the prose. Worldtraveller 19:18, 5 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
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