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Reviewer: Lazman321 (talk · contribs) 17:59, 3 February 2021 (UTC)
Introduction
Hello, I will be reviewing this article for adherence to GA criteria, as this article seems to have been the video game article that has been pending. Let's hope it passes and your patience has been awarded. Lazman321 (talk) 17:59, 3 February 2021 (UTC)
1 - Well written
a - Clear and concise prose
The article is definitely readable and understandable. It does explain the main aspect of the gameplay pretty well, especially since I have never played this game before. There are some prose errors in the article
Here is what they are and what I recommend changing them to:
- ...wherin the player advances through scenes... to ...wherein the player advances through scenes...
- The science fiction chapters of the story follow the explorer as she journeys towards Planet X, to The science fiction chapters of the story follows the explorer, Doctor Cassiopeia, as she journeys towards Planet X,
- ...returning to her home town in Achill Island... to ...returning to her hometown in Achill Island...
- ...her older brother Fergal and mother Brid, to ...her older brother Fergal and her mother Brid,
- After a fight with her mother over her feminine clothes... to After a fight with her mother over Kasio's feminine clothes...
- ...abandoned, decrepit house they are squatting in. to ...abandoned, decrepit house that the band is squatting in.
- ...through a hole in the abandoned house's roof; the next morning, to ...through a hole in the abandoned house's roof. The next morning,
- ...Shans informs Kasio that she agreed to run away together to Dublin as a couple. to ...Shans informs Kasio that he wants him and Kasio to run away together to Dublin as a couple.
- ...despite Colum and Jack's upset with Kasio. to ...despite Colum and Jack being upset with Kasio.
- ...unworthiness to stay with Maggy, and rejected by Shans who tells her... to ...unworthiness to stay with Maggy, and from being rejected by Shans, who tells her...
- ...and put it in the letter box for a woman... to ...and put it in the letterbox for a woman...
- ...by Irish developer Dreamfeel; studio director Llaura McGee was... to ...by Irish developer Dreamfeel. Studio director Llaura McGee was...
- It was published by Annapurna Interactive and released for Microsoft Windows, macOS, and iOS devices on May 19, 2020, and for the Nintendo Switch on October 22, 2020.[1][3][4] should preferably be put at the end of the development section.
- ...Initial development on the game began in 2016; McGee sent a proposed design... to ...Initial development on the game began in 2016. McGee sent a proposed design...
- ...dark hole within Kasio preventing her from having relationships, or missing altogether. to ...dark hole within Kasio preventing her from having relationships, or missing the relationships altogether.
I believe that's it. Hope you get to correcting them. Lazman321 (talk) 13:51, 4 February 2021 (UTC)