IDF recognition
Hi ! Yes, about the IDF recognition for having killed the boy: I don't mean to imply that it proves anything about the IDF being "bad"; it's more about what kind of can of worm the whole story is. Your last version convoys very well the feeling of confusion around this mess -- recognition by the IDF, denying by the IDF, pressing of charges by the Palestinians, then retractation, etc. Thanks and cheers ! Rama 23:28, 8 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- Hi Rama, I'm just wondering what a "grant reporter" is. SlimVirgin 01:19, Feb 9, 2005 (UTC)
Press agency Mena
"The French-speaking Israeli press agency Mena realeased a statement the day after the rushes were examined, Denis Jeambar and Daniel Leconte said, which tended to use them to push the thesis that the whole affair was a scam, a thesis which they said they could not hold at the time."
What does this mean? Jayjg (talk) 01:31, 9 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- There's a lot that isn't clear. If a person knew nothing about this incident, I'm not sure they'd understand it by the time they'd finished reading the article. SlimVirgin 01:43, Feb 9, 2005 (UTC)
Some queries
Rama, I've done a copy edit to try to make some of it clearer, though I'd say it needs a rewrite, because it's still not clear (to anyone not knowing the subject) exactly what the controversy was about. Also, it lacks citations, and there were quite a few POV statements e.g. he wrote "authoritative" books, and there was a "campaign of criticism," rather than just criticism. If you want to say "campaign," you should probably quote someone saying that, or else it looks like your opinion. I've made some sections that need citations invisible, and I've left a few invisible questions for you. Also, how many books has he written on this topic? Your intro says several, but your books section says two,
I couldn't understand these: "Generally, the very heated critics coincided with a movement in France by supporters of Ariel Sharon, and similar political tendencies (Likoud France), to systematically discredit journalists expressing criticism against Israel." the heated critics cooincided with a movement doesn't really mean anything, and if there was such a movement, you'd need a citation. And "Four years later, on the 18th of November 2004, France 2 filed a "Lawsuit against X" for "Public Defaming" " needs to be fleshed out e.g. what is a lawsuit against X.
One thing I noticed when I'd finished is that some of the acutes have turned into odd characters. This happens sometimes when I edit pages containing acutes; it's apparently an incompatibility with the version of Safari I use. I'm going to try to correct them now using a different browser, but in case I don't succeed (because it may be connected to my Mac), below is what needs to be fixed. Sorry about the extra work. Best, SlimVirgin 03:57, Feb 9, 2005 (UTC)
- biography section: Paix ou guerre, les secrets des n?gociations isra?lo-arabes 1917-1997
- al-Dura controversy section: "Ligue de D?fense Juive"
- quotes section: Albert Camus's R?flexions sur le Terrorisme )
- and several in Notes and Books sections
- Okay, I think I fixed the accents. SlimVirgin 04:34, Feb 9, 2005 (UTC)
- And Jay fixed the rest. Thanks, and sorry. SlimVirgin 04:56, Feb 9, 2005 (UTC)