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Whale meat
Dear 60.46.215.114: I am reverting your edit, which deals about the fact that whale meat can be purchased in Sendai, for the following reasons.
- The fact that whale meat can be purchased in Sendai is not particularly notable, because whale meat can be bought throughout Japan. There are many online websites that sell whale meat, so it is not something particularly restricted to Sendai City. Sendai also is a relatively large city in Japan, so it is not surprising that whale meat can be purchased in the city. Additionally, there are six cities in Japan with whaling bases; however, Sendai is not one of them. Therefore, I believe your edit, which mentions that whale meat can be bought in Sendai, is similar to editing an article about a European city and writing that Hashish can be purchased in the city, when it is widely available in Europe, according to the Hashish article. If you want to write about the fact that whale meat is widely available in Japan, you should edit the Whaling in Japan article.
- I believe your edit is rather biased, and is not written from a neutral point of view. It is official Wikipedia policy to write articles from a neutral point of view. which is "absolute and non-negotiable," according to founder Jimbo Wales [1]. For example, you write "Furthermore, Whale meat eating is no longer part of the culture but has become rather a luxury that nature can no longer afford". I believe this statement is not an established fact, but an opinion.
- Your edit is also factually incorrect. You write that the fact that whale meat is available in Sendai "reveals that Japan is indeed breaching Whaling rules and regulations." However, according to the whaling article, whale meat purchased in Sendai is obtained through scientific whaling, carried out under the rules described within Article VIII of the International Convention on the Regulation of Whaling. Therefore, Japan is not breaching any whaling rules or regulations. I request you to make an effort to write factually correct edits in the future.
I sincerely request you to refrain from making questionable edits to this article in the future. Atsi Otani 12:14, 15 August 2005 (UTC)
Comments on article
Since we were asked to comment on the Japan related topics board, let me say that the top of the article should be greatly lengthened to give more of an introduction to the city. After the first paragraph, the text goes straight into a fairly detailed description of the history of the city, which was probably too detailed for the top of the article. I didn't want to get into those details right away. It would be nice if some more general information could be given before getting into these details. Also, some of the English in the article is rather unidiomatic if not ungrammatical. For example, "Sendai has five wards since 1989" is not good English. This is just one example of many I noticed. In the section on specialities, there is very little detail about the foods themselves, but instead after one sentence about the articles, there is a discussion of which place invented what, which is not so interesting for a general English speaking reader. I have never been to Sendai but I have some friends from there and I've discussed the city with them. I was surprised that so much information for example about gyutan was missing. Also, for example, gyutan should have a macron. There are some dead links e.g. to Sendai castle which should be filled in. --DannyWilde 11:27, 18 September 2005 (UTC)