User:Emw3181/Amplexus/K.white31 Peer Review

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General info

• Whose work are you reviewing? Emw3181
• Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Emw3181/Amplexus

Lead

The first sentence of the lead introduces and explains the behaviour of amplexus well. However, the lead itself contains more information than what would be considered a brief description/summary of the articles major points. All of the information within it is great and relevant to the topic but some may be better placed within other sections to expand on the ideas further. Some examples would be the mention of the larger muscles in the forelimbs, and grips on the thumbs of male amphibians. Further, the mention of studies and mate competition in the lead. These subjects may be better suited for other sections!

Content

The content contained in the draft is all relevant to the topic. There seems to be more of a focus on the behaviour in amphibians than in horseshoe crabs, this is likely due to more studies and information within this group of animals. The content added by the student is good information. There is a lot of content in the student draft that previously existed in the stub/start class article but the added information complements the previously written information. I personally found the information about the hormones in the lead very interesting but I feel that it should maybe be moved to a section on the process or mechanism of mating, along with the information about mate choice and competition.

Tone and Balance

The tone of the draft is completely neutral. There does not seem to be any bias toward any particular position. I believe the content added by the student does a great job at keeping a neutral viewpoint.

Sources and References

The student provided many reputable sources. Each claim seems to be backed up appropriately. The link to the first reference however says it has expired.

Organization

The content of the draft is well written and the student provided a lot of good information. The lead is content heavy, and I believe the organization would be better if some of the information was split into another section. The article seems to be grammatically sound, and I did not see any spelling errors.

Images and Media

The student didn't include any additional images in the draft. There were many included in the stub article.

Overall impressions

I personally think the content added by the student improved the quality of the article. There was more information provided about the mechanism of mating, and how amplexus facilitates this task for certain animals. I enjoyed reading the draft and think with minor changes to the structure of the article it will make an awesome contribution!