User:Liagabrielafp/Community development planning/Kayleegmorgan Peer Review

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Liagabrielafp

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User:Liagabrielafp/Community development planning
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Community development planning

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From what it looks like, you're adding one sentence to the end of the paragraph, so I don't have a lot of suggestions to add :) If you wanted to go above and beyond it could be worthwhile to add an example of an actual community development project that was successful. Not sure if Wikipedia articles normally do that, but as someone who doesn't have a ton of community development background/knowledge, having an example could help visualize it a little better. You could maybe pull a sentence of two from the Duriappah reading and talk about participatory approaches, but I'm not sure if that's redundant or not.


The lead is being updated by nature of the new sentence being added, and the article being so short anyways. The content added is relevant and adds a more nuanced perspective to the information already there. I like that it adds enough information for readers to continue doing more sophisticated research. I love that you added another source to the article. Previously it only had one source so I think it's important there are multiple in order to keep the information more neutral.